Friday 9 December 2011

Flash Fiction Friday -- December 9, 2011

Flash Fiction Friday

Welcome to this week’s Flash Fiction Friday. We have a picture about which we write a story of 100 words, no more and no less. I am joined by some fabulous writers today who give their take on this picture. To see the other members click this blog link: Flasher Fiction Friday





Shawn designed the dress for his sister with no detail too small and no expense spared. Abe remembered the sleepless nights as his beloved had gone over every detail.

Now looking at the face that so closely resembled the one so dear to him, Abe couldn’t help but feel disappointed himself. Dawn looked so unhappy and whether it was with the dress or the upcoming wedding ceremony Abe could feel the anxiety start to grip him.

Things had finally settled down between him and Shawn’s family but it looked like once again the shit was going to hit the fan.

20 comments:

Naomi Shaw said...

I need to know more. What had happened within the family?

ERP said...

Nice one CJM! So, what is making the bride to be so unhappy. What happened. Does the family not like her intended? Did her intended make a pass at Shawn instead of Dawn? Questions, questions.

Cassandre Dayne said...

Very nicely done!

Jade said...

Hum... Looks like it's not foing to be a happy wedding... or a happy mariage.
Well done!

Muffy Wilson said...

There is trouble in the family even before she gets married. Well done!!:) xo

Sherri Hayes said...

That doesn't sound good. What happened with the family?

Lee Brazil said...

Nice! Well done! Cyril! I like the hint of disaster approaching.

Benjamin T. Russell said...

This is a very interesting post on so many levels. Why is Dawn looking so sad? Exactly who is she getting married to - Abe? How "open" is the relationship between Abe and Shawn? Question, questions - a mystery.

Excellent, Cyril - this is a cool post and I had to re-read it twice and it still left me with questions. Now that's what FFF is all about, a tease that makes the reader want more.

Anonymous said...

Uh-oh. Here comes trouble. If I were him I'd hit the road and wouldn't come back. Great FFF!

Bonni S. said...

Well damn, the dress is beautiful so she shouldn't be upset about that. Maybe the regret in her eyes is the fact she's only going to be screwing one guy for the rest of her life. Or that she realizes she's settling for less than she should in her choice of mates. This could be a whole lot of different things. I love the possibilities because it has the potential to be quite the story.

Unknown said...

Hmm, interesting FFF. Makes you think about families and how messed up they are.

Katie Harper said...

I love a brother who looks after his sister! I have four fantastic brothers who have been there for me in ways you can't imagine. This post hit my gooey spot.

And what the ef is up with Shawn's family!!!

GREAT JOB!!

Anonymous said...

Oh this one looped me right on in. I’m anxious to know what happens next, and what makes the shit hit the fan. Inquiring minds want to know. *grin* Great FFF!

VenusBookluvr said...

Nice post, I have to know what happens next!

Havan said...

Abe will keep peace if it makes Shawn happy. Aw! :D

Luna Ella Aldora said...

Maybe Abe needs to have a conversation with his beloved's sister (about to be sister-in-law?) and try to gauge the situation before it becomes too late. I hope things smooth over. Very emotional, Cyril. I feel for them all!

Unknown said...

Oh Cyril, you can't leave me with that! I need to know if Abe and Shawn work it out with Shawn's stupid homophobic family because that's what I am reading as the underlying cause of the selfish sister's sadness. It has nothing to do with who she's marrying unless she's just jealous that they will never be as happy as my boys. This begs for another story and I hope you write it Cyril. Kisses

Sherry Palmer said...

Great FFF, leaves me wanting more..alot of loose ends to keep me guessing.

Davee Jones said...

I felt that Abe and Shawn's relationship are not exactly accepted within Shawn's family. What clinches the sadness is how Dawn's unhappiness would be reason again for their relationship to be attacked. very thought provoking FFF

Lindsey said...

Heartbreaking. It's always sad when family is so disapproving. Wonderful FFF.